Sunday, 13 April 2014

Camp writing


Purpose:experience from camp, using short sentences to create suspense.

WALT: Entertain (recount)

Task: To write a recount based on something scary or suspenseful that happened to you.

I think I did well I just maybe next time to add on to those boring sentences. 

Criteria: I canSelf Assessment

Peer Comment

Descriptive vocabulary (words that help to SHOW the reader)

  • use a range of verbs

  • use a variety of adverbs

Language features (phrases that help paint a picture)

  • select 2 - 3 similes

  • select 2 - 3 metaphors or personification

  • choose onomatopoeia to show sounds (crash!)

  • select words that start with the same sound (alliteration)

Sentences

  • use short sentences to create suspense

Structure

  • use 3 - 5 paragraphs.

Name:Olivia 

Overall, how well do you think your learning partner has done?





Peer coment: Bella I think that you could add some more wow and you could tell every one about what is happening in the story.
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Draft 2




I hope you like it my camp writing it is about caving.
By bella


Wednesday, 9 April 2014

Tuesday, 8 April 2014

Camp presentation

WALT:present 
Success Criteria:
Know your stuff 
Loud clear voice
Share the main points
Make eye contact
Make sure every member participates
This is our camp presentation for camp our topic was abseiling hope you like it.i think I need to beprepared on how many people are going to be there and our group didn't get on to well.so we didn't have the best presentation because all that was on ther was facts and a little bit of colour.i think we could do a lot better next time. 
 

A video about Anzac Day

http://www.abc.net.au/btn/story/s2842158.htm

This is a link to a story about Anzac Day i don't think it is fair about the kids that don't get to celabrate the tradition and remember everyone that fought at war. 

Monday, 7 April 2014

Camp goals

W.A.L.T.set smart goals.Success Criteria:
Use photos to share our camp experiences
Use text to explain the kotahitanga
These are what we did every day a comment of what we did and what we found challenging  

Swimming sports

W.A.L.T.evaluate 
We did swimming sports a few weeks ago
I came 1st in back stroke 
And I came 3rd in breast strokes
I made a pic collage of some of the photos the teachers took at swimming sports
I am in kiwi house.kiwi won.go kiwi!!!!!!!

Anzac Day

This is my Anzac Day pic collage it shows why Anzac Day is spiecal,how to make Anzac Day biscuits and shy Anzac Day biscuits are spiecal.hope you like it 

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Thursday, 3 April 2014

Self-managing learners

We have a wall of learner dispositions and I am a self managing learner here is a picture of the wall.
We have been doing a sheet of why we are that kind of learners and the WALT:make good choices about our learning her is a picture of my work

Wednesday, 2 April 2014

Swimming

WALT:evaluat honestley.We went swimming at the school pool with our buddies.my buddies are Maria and teilana.i pretended to have a horse but it was just a floaty

Fill in the blanks

I had to fill in the blanks picking from the words on the side.i don't know if they are all right but I hope they are

Tuesday, 1 April 2014

My reflect on my camp goals

My camp goals were to give positive feed back or advice and manage my belongings.i gave positive feedback When kaylana made it to the top of the rock climbing tower and I high fived her and said well done and the same with Fraser because he made it to the top of the rock climbing tower too.i wasn't so good with my belongings because I lost my sleeping bag case I might need to work on managing my belongings a little bit longer.