Sunday, 14 September 2014

Reading sample

My reading goal this term was to

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TASK inquiring readers go through a process to gather, organise and respond to new information. We have been using  the ‘GET IT, SORT IT, USE IT’ process for our own reading inquiry.


My inquiry question was…how many flordia panthers are left






WALT


GET IT...use a range of sources by questioning and predicting


SORT IT...analyse and sort information to answer my question: see if my thinking has changed, look for patterns by questioning inferring, summarising


USE IT…discuss what I have found out with others and make connections




SUCCESS CRITERIA


I can research using a range of sources


I can keep asking questions as a research


I can sort information and see patterns


I can show changes in my thinking


I can co-operate with others to discuss ideas


I can share my learning with others


I can manage my own learning and behaviour to work independently



                                                                   



How did my thinking change during my inquiry? What patterns did I notice?how endangered some anmails are like for example the I thought there would be like 2000 flordia panthers left but there are only about 100-160 adult flordia panthers left.



Writing sample term 3

WALT:  Entertain

My writing goal this term was to use simile, metaphor and emotive language
                                                                                                       
SUCCESS CRITERIA
I have included a range of similes, metaphors, onomatopoeia and/or alliteration to create meaning and effect and hold the reader’s interest.

TASK: craft a free-choice piece of writing that shows how I am developing my goal

Bella and the ballerina: first draft
Introduction 
Bella had a dream.a dream a dream to be a ballerina.every night she dreamt about it.
The pore family
The sad thing was bella and all her family were broke.they got two dollars a day.in her family there were 8 people.her mum her dad her brother her sister her brother her sister her sister and her self.she told her mum and her dad about her dream and they said"no we don't have enough money were about as pore as a kid.so bella ran away.she found some wood on the foot path and she had an idea.she could make a stand asking for money to help the pore.on Monday she got two dollars on Tuesday she got three dollars on wednesdayshe got five dollars then she had to pack up because it started raining she also had to find some shelter.she could either spend her money on shelter or save up for ballet...
The birthday
Have a guess what she decided..she decided shelter I can make my stand another day she said on her head.she knocked every hous of Nottingbum until some one took her in.she had the loveliest mansion and apool.it was bellas birthday tomorrow...good morning world!!it ma  birthday it ma birthday she sang to her self oh wait my mum and dad are not here.i have to find them so she ran out of the house but first she got dressed of course because she was only in her nickers!!then she ran out of the house to find them
The money
She ran down the streets of Nottingbum until she made it to her real home with her mum and dad.but believe it or not she made her stand again and raised ten full bucks.the next day she raised 20 dollars and the next day she raised 50 bucks!!!!!wich means she has 90 dollars now!!!enough to buy a mansion with a zebra the colour of candy floss.but guess what she bought ballet classes a uniform and enough money for a small house
The famous ballerina 
When she was older she became a famous ballerina.she also became a grade 12 and the most famous ballerina ever.she also meet her husband Stephen.they meet through ballet.they bought a flash mansion together and got married and had a baby girl named rose and they lived happily ever after by bella
Bella and the ballerina

Bella had a dream.A dream to be a ballerina.Every night she dreamt about it.
  
The sad thing was bella and all her family were broke.

in her family there were 8 people.She had  her mum and her dad .Two brothers and four sisters also herself. 

She told her mum and dad about her dream and they said"no we don't have enough money were about as pore as a kid.so bella ran away.

She found a pile of wood on the foot path and she had an idea.She could make a stand asking for money to help the pore.Though the whole week she got ten dollars.Soon she had to pack up because it started raining she also had to find some shelter.


When she was older she became a famous ballerina.She also became a grade 12 and the most famous ballerina ever.

She also meet her husband Stephen.They meet through ballet.They bought a flash mansion together and got married and had a baby girl named rose and they lived happily ever after.They went on to do twenty ballet proformence and won lots and lots of awards.by bella


And here is my edited piece...
I could either spend my money on shelter or save up for ballet. It feels like World War two in my head.I don't know what pick.But I'm going to have to make the decision sooner or later so shelter won the fight!Only because I had a whole lot of reasons why shelter is  important to me.I'm lucky to be alive today so I think I'll pick shelter.

I can always  make my stand again another day I thought, trying to convince myself I made the right decision.I think I made the right decision so lets go get some shelter.I knocked on every motel of Nottingbum then I  came to the last motel hoping with desperation that this one will have one room left.Luckily they did.I paid my  last 10 dollars that I had - no food today.When I came inside it knocked my socks off.It was so beautiful!It should be because I paid my last arm and leg for this.By the end of the night my tummy was grumbling as loud as a lions roar but it doesnt matter as long as I am still alive.


Evaluation
How has your writing has improved this term? I think my similes have gotten better and my punctuation because of how hard I have worked.

The part of my story I am most proud of is….'her face turned as pail as freshly falling snow' because it is using my goal

Next time, what is a goal you can work towards? Using capital letters when I need to.

Feedback/feed forward:I think your story was very interesting it really hooked the reader in next time you could put in precise words. 
-Tabitha

Thursday, 11 September 2014

Maths sample

WALT: extend a repeating picture pattern and use number stratergies to think ahead.


Description: For maths this term we have been learning a range of strategies to help us solve algebra problems. 

Task:  Make a short movie to prove that you have achieved your maths goal.

Criteria:
Show, explain, prove your goal and how you did it
Clear message
Two questions to show your learning
Correct answer




Evaluation:
What are you most proud of and why? I am proud of how clear I worked it out

What challenged you the most and why?finding a question to use was hard because I didn't know what to get.

Next time, what is a goal you can work towards?harder questions 

Feedback/Feedforward: Bella I think you did very well next time you could put the music down a bit so we can hear you lovely voice
-Tabitha